if I spent
spring sitting at the river’s edge
expecting
nothing, I was probably just waiting
for the sun
to ignite my skin -----
I still ponder there, like the
last raven
in the
autumn dusk, not quite feeling at home
but close
enough to that everlasting light
to stay
awhile longer, breathing the sky
knowing you
could be more
than this
skeleton you've become
quenching your thirst
forging your
words
flying your
dreams on a kite
only to be
shot down
dragging
assumptions on the floor
when they
should be lighter than air
if there
was a washer of our minds
up where
the clouds are born
he'd grew
weary a long time ago
and quit his job
when you
hear yourself think
do you go deaf?
*
sitting in the sun thinking - what could be better. Lovely poem
ReplyDeleteThis poem is a story, it's a song... I all the words.... breathtaking
ReplyDeleteA nostalgic but beautiful poem, filled with very evocative imagery. I like "but close enough to that everlasting light / to stay awhile longer, breathing the sky". And you are right assumptions should be lighter than air.
ReplyDelete...that hanging question at the end is like a scary thought to think about... yet, true to some intances in life... smiles...
ReplyDeleteA thought provoking piece with questions left to answer
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed the way you pondered important things in this poem. I think sitting at the river's edge would be the perfect setting to ponder. Some beautifully worded lines. I like the idea of flying dreams on a kite but am saddened they are shot down. Your question at the end provokes thought, Natasa.
ReplyDeletePrompts one to look deeper in life.
ReplyDeletean excellent and profound question, Natasa ~ M
ReplyDeleteBreathtaking if you ask me. Amazing thoughts. The ending just caught me unguarded and hit my mind wit everything you wanted to say out of this poem. Keep it going. :)
ReplyDelete'flying your dreams on a kite'
ReplyDeletethat is very good. I like this one.
Beautiful!
ReplyDeleteoh, very cool close on the question natasa....
ReplyDeleteit is interesting how some places just feel right in certain seasons
and so uncomfortable in others---the last raven of the season
is a cool line as well...
I enjoyed the reflections on the seasons ~ Maybe I like to think out aloud & sort my thoughts first before writing them down ~ Thanks for sharing ~
ReplyDeleteThis is brilliant, especially the latter half of the poem.
ReplyDelete"knowing you could be more
than this skeleton you've become"
"dragging assumptions on the floor
when they should be lighter than air" - These lines are superb.
And yes, if there was one as such to sift through our thoughts, in due time, (s)he will surely go weary. When I hear myself think, sometimes, I end up wishing that I was deaf. :P
excellent.. being one that enjoys the solitude especially in nature... this really appealed...
ReplyDeletein Nature this really
knowing you could be more
ReplyDeletethan this skeleton you've become...
Your words are beautiful, so melancholy, but this is a mood many can relate to.
I LOVE "I still ponder there like the last raven"........there is a lot to think about in this poem. Loved it!
ReplyDeleteOh, yes, there are places we need to visit to have those moments when we ponder...no matter the season. This was gorgeous!
ReplyDeleteI loved the introspective part of this--I am in this place so often in my little world---your piece resonates
ReplyDeletea wonderful argument ... Shhhhhhhhh
ReplyDeleteZQ
I love the contemplative tone throughout coupled with some provocative questioning. Excellent and thoughtful write!
ReplyDeletebreathtaking!
ReplyDeletei liked the way you linked all these lovely imagery together.
the questions are framed beautifully
ReplyDeleteand then you end it with a twang in the brain
very well constructed