I remember
how my skin
found new depths of itself
under those
caressing notes he played
and with
what ease it seemed,
like he's
been doing this for years
unravelling
peoples skins,
pilling off
their shells and armour
digging
holes under the roots of tall trees
speaking in
soothing tones; as if it's the voice
which can
break another heart; when in fact
it's the
words which escape our mouths
with no thunder, no lighting
yet they
cut through flesh without leaving behind
bleeding
wounds; I forgot,
forgot the
words to which I'm an author
but I carry
yours inside me - sadness surrounds them
for the
truth once was; we took steps in the same
direction,
yet the paths were our own
we stuck
together through any kind of weather
and still
remembered we once stood alone
in the
wonderment of childhood
only now do
we realize the magic we used to experience
have we
escaped it and why would we want to?
has the
present taught us to run away?
with half
bent knees building a future
making endeavours
to follow conformity in our paths
oh, I do remember a touch
which
caught me and brought me back here
and the choices
I make will never
be the same again
*
I'm not good at what I'd call "intentional writing", where you have a few starting point and instructions to follow, but here and there I try some new things. This poem is a contribution to Poetry United prompt - I remember. It's the fastest I ever wrote a poem, I think. Does it show?
"but I carry yours inside me - sadness surrounds them" How beautifully this poem flows down the river of remembrance. Very beautiful to read. I didnt used to be able to write to prompts - but now I find they really help, when one is trying to write every day, as it gives us a starting point. You did wonderfully with this prompt!
ReplyDeletethank you, glad you liked it.. yes, this one was a great starting point.
DeleteHa, we can always get back the magic.... If we escaped it, we can find it again. We might not make the same choices, but we might find magic elsewhere! I did like the flow of your poem. Sometimes this technique works, and it obviously worked for you.
ReplyDeleteor maybe it's that childhood innocence which escaped us.. we can still recapture it through the eyes of our children. and thank you :)
Deleteyet they cut through flesh without leaving behind - Love this line the image it gives, Love and blood are soul mates, interwoven into the very soul of us. Words cut and produce life. Well captured, i really liked it.
ReplyDeleteyou put it lovely, thank you for that. :)
DeleteBeautiful! "only now do realize the magic we used to experience..." so true and yes we can recapture it through our children.
ReplyDeleteNice flow as if you were putting down everything that came along coherently
ReplyDeletethank, I'm glad to hear if flows well, in my head it didn't ;)
DeleteEnjoyed reading your poem!I think this shows that the prompt touched something in your heart and the words came flowing out!
ReplyDeletethat's true, it did touch a part in me.. thank you.
DeleteYou are a very good writer. I am enjoy poems that thought provoke and gets the reader to think in a reflective state. You do that well, keep it up
ReplyDeletethank you, I like those kind of poems too, and I'm glad if readers find something more in the poems, something that gets them thinking, or feeling.
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