where is it written
how many days one must spend
roaming through the fog
where terrain is moist and slippery
and nothing can be taken for granted
not the past, not the future
the uncertainty
testing your will to survive
how far does the smoke
reach
of burned passion and dreams
does it change your view
fire will rekindle unexpectedly
if only you can step on the same road again
one, two, three...
mistakes are lessons
and lessons learned bring clearance
does the haze cloud your
judgment
the ability to see the light
somewhere beyond
does it hide the secrets
we fear to share
or can you see the stories emerging
grand and filled with love
from which a fresh start is given
I thought that was beautiful...very nice!
ReplyDeletedoes it hide the secrets
ReplyDeletewe fear to share
or can you see the stories emerging
One is wary of what nature provides even though there are signs of goodness seen! Wonderful lines Natasa!
Hank
Indeed we learn from our mistakes and to better our tomorrows
ReplyDeleteThe extended metaphor of fog and smoke really works for how we are finding our way on life's path.
ReplyDeleteThere are so many barriers or irritations to cause one to stumble in life! Very true Natasa!
ReplyDeleteHank
Hank
Definitely difficult to see the light of decision, in paths marked my obstructing fog and dangerous smoke. Better to be well equipped with hope and inspiration, just in case.
ReplyDeleteThought provoking!
Poppy
new lessons learnt through fog, smoke and haze do give us a fresh start...beautifully woven...
ReplyDeleteSmoke, fog, clouds are all constantly changing just as we are, seen but unseen and difficult to capture like our minds.
ReplyDeleteI like the way you have set out each stanza, and developed both your theme and the metaphor.
ReplyDeleteOh I loved how you used fog as imagery to depict feelings of uncertainty.. perhaps when the fog clears... so does our head.. and we are able to overcome obstacles in life :D
ReplyDeleteLots of love
xoxo
We all have fog and smoke in life, I think, but hopefully we find ways of finding that clarity despite the haze!
ReplyDeleteGreat and meaningful imagery in your poem, Nataša. There are times however when the fog lift and the clouds are blown away.
ReplyDeletethe imagery is so enchanting
ReplyDeleteFirst I like the style in which this poem was written. We often have to find our way through fog and haze in the journey of life to see the vision clearly.
ReplyDeleteThis is beautifully and creatively written. Each stanza is so full of meaning, May the haze lift in all our lives.
ReplyDeleteNataša I felt the fog clouding me, keeping me from seeing clearly, and sometimes treacherous as well as the smoke from fire both destroying and creating....how we are many times caught in this hazy moments unable to see clearly....but as you say at the end....
ReplyDelete' or can you see the stories emerging
grand and filled with love
from which a fresh start is given'
Not all has to be lost in that fog and haze....we can emerge fresh....love this!
First, I LOVE the way the clouds hang in the mountains that way - mesmerizing. This poem is lovely to read, and the ending is really satisfying. So well written, Natasa.
ReplyDeleteah yes i like the theme of the fog lifting, for isnt that a metaphor of learning as we trek the path of life
ReplyDeletethanks for dropping in at my Sunday Lime, today
much love...
Love the form and the sentiment of choice in how one views "the haze" of life ... Lovely
ReplyDeleteI love those first three lines....what a beautiful way to start a poem!!
ReplyDeleteit can cause lots of anxiety to know that fire can rekindle unexpectedly ;)
ReplyDeleteMy Brain is a Cheap Gadget That Spins
Reaching for the silver lining ... good reminder that sorrows have edges to move beyond.
ReplyDeleteThe first stanza really grabbed me. I think I will always be in a little bit of fog! Thanks for visiting my blog.
ReplyDeleteWonderful ... the quest for clarity beautifully articulated.
ReplyDeleteWhere indeed! Each stanza could stand alone, as a pondering of the human earthly experience. Nicely written!
ReplyDeleteWonderful connection between the past not being taken for granted and lessons needing to be learned
ReplyDeletevery insightful.
ReplyDeleteZQ
Informative article, totally what I needed.
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