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Sunday, 19 April 2015

Poem: Smoke, fog and haze


where is it written
                how many days one must spend
                roaming through the fog
                where terrain is moist and slippery
                and nothing can be taken for granted
                not the past, not the future
                the uncertainty
                testing your will to survive

how far does the smoke reach
                of burned passion and dreams
                does it change your view
                fire will rekindle unexpectedly
                if only you can step on the same road again
                one, two, three...
                mistakes are lessons
                and lessons learned bring clearance

does the haze cloud your judgment
                the ability to see the light
                somewhere beyond
                does it hide the secrets
                we fear to share
                or can you see the stories emerging
                grand and filled with love
                from which a fresh start is given

27 comments:

  1. I thought that was beautiful...very nice!

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  2. does it hide the secrets
    we fear to share
    or can you see the stories emerging

    One is wary of what nature provides even though there are signs of goodness seen! Wonderful lines Natasa!

    Hank

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  3. Indeed we learn from our mistakes and to better our tomorrows

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  4. The extended metaphor of fog and smoke really works for how we are finding our way on life's path.

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  5. There are so many barriers or irritations to cause one to stumble in life! Very true Natasa!

    Hank

    Hank

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  6. Definitely difficult to see the light of decision, in paths marked my obstructing fog and dangerous smoke. Better to be well equipped with hope and inspiration, just in case.

    Thought provoking!

    Poppy

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  7. new lessons learnt through fog, smoke and haze do give us a fresh start...beautifully woven...

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  8. Smoke, fog, clouds are all constantly changing just as we are, seen but unseen and difficult to capture like our minds.

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  9. I like the way you have set out each stanza, and developed both your theme and the metaphor.

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  10. Oh I loved how you used fog as imagery to depict feelings of uncertainty.. perhaps when the fog clears... so does our head.. and we are able to overcome obstacles in life :D

    Lots of love
    xoxo

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  11. We all have fog and smoke in life, I think, but hopefully we find ways of finding that clarity despite the haze!

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  12. Great and meaningful imagery in your poem, Nataša. There are times however when the fog lift and the clouds are blown away.

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  13. the imagery is so enchanting

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  14. First I like the style in which this poem was written. We often have to find our way through fog and haze in the journey of life to see the vision clearly.

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  15. This is beautifully and creatively written. Each stanza is so full of meaning, May the haze lift in all our lives.

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  16. Nataša I felt the fog clouding me, keeping me from seeing clearly, and sometimes treacherous as well as the smoke from fire both destroying and creating....how we are many times caught in this hazy moments unable to see clearly....but as you say at the end....

    ' or can you see the stories emerging
    grand and filled with love
    from which a fresh start is given'

    Not all has to be lost in that fog and haze....we can emerge fresh....love this!

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  17. First, I LOVE the way the clouds hang in the mountains that way - mesmerizing. This poem is lovely to read, and the ending is really satisfying. So well written, Natasa.

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  18. ah yes i like the theme of the fog lifting, for isnt that a metaphor of learning as we trek the path of life

    thanks for dropping in at my Sunday Lime, today

    much love...

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  19. Love the form and the sentiment of choice in how one views "the haze" of life ... Lovely

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  20. I love those first three lines....what a beautiful way to start a poem!!

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  21. it can cause lots of anxiety to know that fire can rekindle unexpectedly ;)

    My Brain is a Cheap Gadget That Spins

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  22. Reaching for the silver lining ... good reminder that sorrows have edges to move beyond.

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  23. The first stanza really grabbed me. I think I will always be in a little bit of fog! Thanks for visiting my blog.

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  24. Wonderful ... the quest for clarity beautifully articulated.

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  25. Where indeed! Each stanza could stand alone, as a pondering of the human earthly experience. Nicely written!

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  26. Wonderful connection between the past not being taken for granted and lessons needing to be learned

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